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Summary - AU/AU Jack and Ennis are on the 1st volleyball team at high school. Jack is a junior and Ennis a senior. They didn't like each other at first (but times are changing...)

Last chapter recap - E and J played their last game of the season, they met up later at the beach party and J asked E to teach him to surf...

Jack and Ennis (plus other BBM characters) do sadly not belong to me, *sniff*. This is written purely for fun.

Special thanks as always [livejournal.com profile] hesamathgeek for the beta, I couldn't do this without your help!

Warnings - m/m action (and a bit of angst)

Feedback - yes please!



As soon as his aunt and uncle had gone on Sunday and lunch was over, Jack rushed off to get changed. Blowing his mom a goodbye kiss he tripped out of the front door in his haste and ran around the corner to the spot where Ennis had dropped him off after their first “date.” He sat on a low stone wall and twisted his bag in his hands as he nervously waited. A couple of minutes later he heard the unmistakable rumble of Ennis’ pickup and saw it appear over the hill at the end of the road. Heart jumping into his throat, Jack forced himself to stand up slowly and casually swing his bag over his shoulder as Ennis pulled up alongside him. Jack noticed two surfboards tied into the back of the truck.

“Afternoon.” Ennis had both windows rolled down and pushed his shades on top of his head to get a better look at Jack. He looked as sexy as hell.

“Hey,” Jack replied, climbing up into the passenger seat, drinking in the sight of Ennis in a white sleeveless t-shirt and the same brown board shorts he’d seen him in on the day of the ice cream incident. “You managed to get two boards?” Jack gestured to the back of the truck.

“Yeah, one’s my brother’s. He’s away at college so he won’t miss it.” Ennis ran his fingers lightly down Jack’s arm, making him shudder, before pulling his shades back on and turning the truck around.

“Was he the one I saw you with on the beach the other week?” Jack asked, eyes on Ennis’ lips as he drove.

“Nah, that was my cousin. We’re the same age and pretty much grew up together. He lives on the other side of the state now.”

“Oh.” Jack only had two girl cousins and they were much younger than him. “Sounds cool. I don’t have any brothers or sisters. Would’ve been nice to grow up with someone my own age.”

“Yeah, it was cool I guess.”

It took Jack a few minutes to realize that they weren’t turning down the usual road to the local beach.

“Where are we going?”

“A little way up the coast. The waves are better to learn on and the beach is less busy there.” Ennis shot a quick glance at Jack. “Fewer innocent people for you to plow into.”

“Hey!” Jack gave him a defiant look. “I could be a natural for all you know.”

“Guess we’ll find out soon enough.” Ennis’ lips twitched and that made Jack more determined than ever. Ennis wasn’t the only person who could be good at everything!

A little while later they pulled into a half-empty parking lot. Ennis turned off the engine and looked around quickly before reaching across to curl his fingers in Jack’s hair, pulling him forward for a deep kiss. Jack responded immediately, dropping his bag on the floor to free up his hands to grasp at Ennis’ head, stroking the back of his neck. Ennis moaned and thrust his tongue deeper into Jack’s mouth. Jack’s breath caught as Ennis slid a warm hand up his thigh, fingers brushing under the edge of his shorts.

“I thought you were showing me how to surf,” Jack mumbled against Ennis’ lips, although even as he spoke his hips wriggled to allow Ennis’ hand more room to move up inside his shorts. Mmmm, it felt so nice that he was almost tempted to forget the surfing lesson and just make out with Ennis instead, but Ennis slowly withdrew his hand and eased up the pressure on Jack’s mouth.

“Hmm, you’re right,” he breathed, dark eyes hooded. “We’ve got all afternoon.”

Yeah and hopefully lots more touching, kissing and who knows what else, thought Jack with a shiver of excitement.

****
They dragged their things down to one end of the beach, as far away as they could from the other people there.

“This’ll do,” said Ennis, dropping his board and bag on the sand, stripping off his t-shirt. Jack did the same and eyed Ennis’ chest for a few seconds before Ennis cleared his throat and Jack’s eyes were forced back to Ennis’ face.

“Sorry, got distracted.” He flushed.

“Easily done,” Ennis replied and flicked his eyes over Jack’s body before leaning down to pick up his board. “Ok, basics first.”

Lying the boards next to each other on the sand, Ennis showed Jack the best position to lie in and how to jump to standing, pushing and pulling his feet into the right place. He made Jack do it time and time again until he was happy.

“Ok, let’s hit the water,” Ennis said. “We’ll do it lying down first though.”

“It?” Jack raised an eyebrow with a smirk.

Ennis gave him a deadpan look. “Yeah, doing it too much lying down can chafe your nipples bad though, so watch out for that.”

Jack choked back a laugh. “Ok, I’ll watch yours if you watch mine.” His tongue licked his lower lip as his gaze traveled down to Ennis’ chest again.

Ennis’ eyes flared. “Done,” he said, mouth quirking. “Now let’s get your ass wet.”

Out at sea it took Jack a few attempts to get his timing right in order to catch a wave. Ennis was sitting on his own board, barking out instructions at his side.

“Ok, here’s a good one, watch it come in. Wait. Ok now go. Turn. Paddle. PADDLE! Ah, too slow. Next one.”

Jack finally caught a wave right and rode the board on his belly back to the shore. It was such a rush! Jumping up in the shallow water he turned to wave at Ennis with a grin.

Ennis was still perched astride his board out at sea. He waved back at Jack and beckoned him over. “Come back out and do it again,” he yelled.

Jack obediently paddled back out until he was next to Ennis, face flushed with exertion and the thrill of learning something new.

“Cool, huh?” Ennis lightly touched Jack’s shoulder.

“Very,” Jack replied and let a hand trail under the water to grasp at Ennis’ ankle. One sharp tug and Ennis was sliding off his board with a splash.

“Hey!’ he said, grabbing at Jack’s arm as he fell, pulling him in too.

They surfaced inches apart, shaking water from their eyes and held onto their boards with one arm, facing each other, bobbing gently, legs brushing underwater. As Jack slicked his hair back, he couldn’t help that his legs seemed to wind around Ennis’ thighs of their own accord, rubbing their crotches together through the thin fabric of their shorts. Jack’s free hand slid down Ennis’ back, rubbing slow circles down to his ass.

“Jack,” Ennis shut his eyes and swallowed, “we can’t here. Too many people around.” Jack felt the betrayal of Ennis’ body though as it grew hard against him. He slid his fingers down under the back of Ennis’ shorts and smoothed his palm over his naked skin to pull them closer together.

“There’s no one that close to us,” Jack said with a gleam in his eye, fingers caressing. “As long as we don’t kiss, people will just think we’re talking. Plus no one can see underwater anyway.”

“Maybe,” admitted Ennis, the rhythmic kicking of his legs to keep them afloat causing the most delicious friction. His one arm was still wrapped tightly around the surfboard and his other moved up Jack’s thigh, under his shorts again, to curve around the bottom of his ass.

“Mmmm,” Jack murmured, wriggling to get closer, the touch of Ennis’ hand making his dick ache in anticipation.

Ennis’ pupils dilated and he responded hoarsely, “Take them off.”

“Huh?” Jack’s eyes dropped to Ennis’ mouth.

“Your shorts, take them off.”

Jack’s breath quickened and, heart thumping, he dragged his hand away from the back of Ennis’ shorts and worked his own down and off, threading his arm securely through one leg – he sure didn’t want to see them floating off into the horizon. Ennis pulled him in close again and Jack felt him ease his own shorts down a little so that his cock sprang free and rubbed against Jack’s, their naked torsos sliding together.

“Oh geez,” Ennis breathed heavily, eyes dark, as his free hand returned to grope at Jack’s ass underwater. Jack wound his legs back around Ennis to force their dicks even closer.

“Oh god,” Jack said, heart racing as the bobbing motion returned and they moved against each other with no material in the way to dull the electric sensation of hot skin against hot skin, cool water swirling around them. “Shit, that feels so good,” he groaned and felt Ennis’ hand move over his butt, stroking, squeezing, his fingers moving across and into the gap in his cheeks. Jack jerked as one finger trailed gently downwards. He sucked in a breath as Ennis found what he was searching for and began a slow rub back and forth.

Jack couldn’t help letting out a small moan of pleasure, his whole body throbbing with need as he pushed his ass back against Ennis’ finger, wanting to increase the pressure behind but also wanting to grind against him frantically. He reach between their bodies and grabbed their dicks together in one hand, hearing Ennis grunt in response as he pumped up and down.

“Jack.” Ennis’ eyes were almost black with lust and Jack wound his legs tighter around his waist, locking his ankles together, wanting to get impossibly closer, his hand pumping quicker as the combined sensation of grinding and Ennis fingering his ass became too much for him. Panting wildly his orgasm ripped out of him with a long moan and he shuddered against Ennis, leaning his head back against his board as his body pulsed and twitched. Ennis was only seconds behind him, Jack feeling him jerk and then the warmth briefly on his hand and stomach, before the sea water dissolved all evidence.

****

After fighting to get his shorts back on underwater, Ennis looking on with amusement, Jack caught another wave back to the shore. Ennis came with him this time. A couple of attempts later he managed to stand up for all of three seconds before falling back in and was forced to watch Ennis effortlessly glide past him like a professional.

“You make it look so easy,” Jack grumbled, clambering back onto his board as Ennis paddled out to him.

“Taken me 10 years to make it look easy,” Ennis said. “You’ll get there, but not after just 10 minutes.”

“Hmph,” said Jack impatiently.

Ennis stroked his arm, brown eyes sympathetic. “Want to take a break?”

“Yeah. One last try though.” Jack was determined not to give in and turned his board back out to the horizon.

****
Lying on his back, baseball cap shielding his eyes from the sun, Jack heard Ennis shift and peeked up at him. Ennis was lying on his side, head in one hand, other hand picking at the edge of his towel.

He squinted at Jack. “D’you think anyone knows?”

“What?”

“About you, me, this,” Ennis gestured between them.

“Why do you ask?” Jack pushed himself up on his elbows. “Someone said something?”

“Not really. I just get the feeling. Chad especially, after that day in the showers.” Ennis’ face was expressionless.

“He given you a hard time?” Jack moved onto his side to face Ennis.

“No, but it’s the way he seems sometimes. Like he knows.” Ennis dug his fingers into the sand and gave Jack a sharp look. “Does your friend Lureen know?”

Jack shifted nervously. “No. She still thinks we hate each other.”

Ennis paused. “I think Chad might ask her to Prom ya know.”

“Prom?” Jack looked surprised.

“Senior Prom, in a couple of weeks.”

“Really?”

“Yeah. He’s liked her for a while, just needed a way in. You gave him that,” Ennis said with a crooked grin.

“Oh. Guess that’s good. Isn’t it?”

“Maybe.”

Jack lay in silence for a bit, letting sand trail through his fingers. “Are you going to Prom?”

Ennis shrugged. “I guess.”

“So who are you taking?”

“Dunno, would have been Alma before…er…well. No one I guess.”

“Can you do that? Go alone I mean?” Jack queried, not liking the thought of Ennis being out with a girl.

“Yeah. A few guys always go stag. Cory is – he reckons they’ll be plenty of single girls looking for a memorable end to high school. If you know what I mean.”

Jack let out a short laugh. “Trust Cory to put a positive spin on everything.”

“Yeah.” Ennis dropped his eyes.

“So, er, will you be expected to hook up at Prom too then?” Jack bit his lip.

“Probably,” Ennis said, not looking at Jack. “Would look kinda odd if I didn’t at least try.”

Jack felt a rare surge of hot jealousy flood through his body; the thought of Ennis “trying it on” with anyone else made him feel sick. “Oh,” he said quietly and ducked his head.

Ennis sat up and rummaged in his bag for a cigarette. He offered one to Jack, who shook his head.

“That’s the way it has to be, Jack.” Ennis flicked open his lighter and drew in a deep breath, watching Jack with narrowed eyes. “It won’t mean anything.”

“That’s not the point,” Jack muttered, lying back down and pulling his cap over his eyes.

“What’s not?” Ennis reached over and lifted Jack’s cap up.

Jack turned and squinted at him. “Whether it means anything or not. The fact that you’re gonna try just because it’s expected seems kinda dumb.” He snatched his cap back from Ennis and jammed in on his head, pulling it low.

He heard Ennis blow out a long breath. “You’re pissed off,” he said in amusement.

“No I’m not,” Jack huffed. “What do I care if you wanna go make eyes at some random chick?”

“Yeah you are,” Ennis continued, poking Jack in the ribs. “I can feel the prickles from here and your mouth’s gone all pouty.” He poked Jack again. “Come on, admit it.”

Jack slapped Ennis’ hand away. “Stop that. Now you’re annoying me.”

Ennis flicked his cigarette away and leaned over Jack to poke him in both sides.

“Goddamn it Ennis!” Jack burst out angrily and tried to grasp Ennis’ hands. Ennis was too quick for him though, ducking under Jack’s flailing arms to tickle him. Jack squirmed, half in pain, half in pleasure. “You fucker. All right, this is war,” he muttered and launched his own attack at Ennis, fingers digging into flesh, hands tickling ribs, legs tangling as they wrestled and rolled around on the sand.

Jack snorted with reluctant laughter as Ennis finally pinned him down with his arms above his head. “Do you give?” he panted, brown eyes sparkling, chest heaving.

“Never,” Jack breathed and Ennis started to slowly lower his head, eyes on Jack’s parted lips….

“Excuse me. EXCUSE ME!” an angry female voice broke into their world, and Ennis jerked his head back with a horrified expression, rolling off Jack quickly.

They both looked up to see a middle-aged woman standing a few feet away, shielding the eyes of a small child in her arms. She glared at them angrily. “This is a public beach you know. There are decent folks here, decent folks with young children. We don’t want to see disgusting behavior like that, on a Sunday of all days.”

Wow, thought Jack, pretty rude thing to say to people you don't know. It wasn't like they were actually *doing* anything, just messing about, certainly nothing to harm her. And who was she to say what was disgusting anyway?

He glanced over at Ennis who looked like a statue, his face frozen in panic.

“Er, we weren't doing anything that bad,” Jack mumbled.

“That's not what it looked like to me.” The woman continued to glare at them. “Kindly control yourselves or go elsewhere. We don’t want your sort here,” and with one final disapproving stare she stalked off.

“Shit.” Jack rubbed his eyes. “That was kinda harsh. Should’ve remembered where we were though I guess.”

Ennis stood up silently and turned away from Jack, hands on hips.

“Ennis?” Jack was suddenly worried, the magic of the afternoon broken by a few words from a stranger. Why the hell hadn’t they been more careful? Ennis didn’t reply and raised a hand at Jack as if to ward him off, then strode off alone down the beach.

TBC
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Date: 2008-06-29 05:53 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] cornflake2912.livejournal.com
Oh no :( :(

Date: 2008-06-29 07:32 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] annabirmingham.livejournal.com
I know :(
Our boys never have things completely easy do they??
Anna x

Date: 2008-06-29 06:02 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kdough66.livejournal.com
Uh oh. Ennis is starting to panic. Never a good sign. I'm looking forward to the next chapter. I love this story!!

Date: 2008-06-29 07:34 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] annabirmingham.livejournal.com
Yes I think Ennis got a little spooked as he got 'lost in the moment' - something he doesn't normally do.
Thanks so much for commenting!
Anna x

Date: 2008-06-29 06:07 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] equally-dour.livejournal.com
Ok, why don't I see cute boys ready to kiss when I go to the beach, hum? *pouts*

Oh, that stupid bitch, she didn't know what she was missing...

Please, please, please don't let Ennis freak out that much, especially with the prom coming up we (and Jack) don't want him trying too hard to get a girl.

And the action underwater was niiiiice!

Date: 2008-06-29 07:37 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] annabirmingham.livejournal.com
Yeah silly cow indeed - hell, I'd pay to see Ennis and Jack make out - not have a go at them!! :)
Ennis doesn't like to lose control and I think that may have freaked him out as much as the woman's comments. Hmm.
Anna x

Date: 2008-06-29 06:08 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] hit-the-hay-65.livejournal.com
I'm coming in really late to this story- I don't know how it slipped under my radar because it's fantastic! You're doing a great job.

Loved seeing the boys happy and flirting at the beginning of this chapter, but now it looks like the bliss has been truly broken =( I hope they can get it back soon. Thanks for sharing Anna!

Date: 2008-06-29 07:39 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] annabirmingham.livejournal.com
Thanks very much - I don't mind how late you are! :)
I like the boys flirting together too, but things never run smoothly in the BBM world as there is always someone who has an issue with them. :(
Anna x

Date: 2008-06-29 06:09 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] camillar.livejournal.com
Uh Oh :( I sense some rough times ahead!
Camilla

Date: 2008-06-29 07:42 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] annabirmingham.livejournal.com
Hi Camilla - yep things may be a little rocky for a bit as Ennis tries to get to grips with his emotions (and actions). Hopefully Jack can smooth the way though!
Anna x

Date: 2008-06-29 06:17 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] danivl4.livejournal.com
WOW! Chapter 14 already. This is such a great story. I am enjoying it immensely. I really have a thing for young Jack and Ennis. I just thought I should tell you how much I appreciate what you are doing with this.

Dani

Date: 2008-06-29 07:44 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] annabirmingham.livejournal.com
Thanks Dani - I really appreciate the comments! I love young J and E too - all those hormones! :))
I can't believe it's chapter 14 either - although they are quite short, so it's probably only really 7 chapters based on other fics!!
Anna x

Date: 2008-06-29 07:02 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] torry28.livejournal.com
Ouch, and damn, yes when you are young and in love you just forget where you are. Ennis is spooked and its not a good sign, I just hope he can get passed this and not shut Jack out or start being mean to him again .
Thank you for the update, never a doll moment is there.
Have a great week.And a great big thank you to hesamathgeek.
Hugs
Torry
Edited Date: 2008-06-29 07:09 pm (UTC)

Date: 2008-06-29 07:45 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] annabirmingham.livejournal.com
Thanks Torry - yes, hormones got the better of Ennis this time and I think that spooked him as much as anything - he's not used to being out of control!
Have a great week too.
Anna x

Date: 2008-06-29 07:17 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] landofthedragon.livejournal.com
My heart is in my mouth right now just wondering if you will ever ease up on the tension, just when things were starting to go smoothly sex on the beach was smoking hot. Well you certainly wiped the smirk off my face J and E frolicking was hardly every one's idea of fun, what a place to end on why do I know theres a lot more angst to come????? Oh yea forgot because you're evil LOL!!!! Seriously I can't tell you how much I enjoy this story even though it drives me crazy but definitely in a good way.

Hugs L

Date: 2008-06-29 07:50 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] annabirmingham.livejournal.com
Thanks L - hehe, yep I am evil and don't you forget it!! :)) Glad you're hanging on in there though! I do feel for J and E as they are just coming to terms with their feelings for each other and some idiot has to ruin the moment. Bah. There may be a bit more angst on the horizon, but fear not, I do like a happy ending!
Anna x

Date: 2008-06-29 07:19 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] brokeback1963.livejournal.com
Oh my, Anna!! Oh my!!! Oh oh oh!! Oooooooh my!! I don't know what to say!!


Mmmmm.....I'll write a big comment for you at the forum!!

Much love.

Tammy.

Date: 2008-06-29 07:51 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] annabirmingham.livejournal.com
LOL - thanks Tammy - I'll have to drop in on the forum later! I do love your comments! :)
Anna x

Date: 2008-06-29 07:23 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] dreamy40.livejournal.com
i love this tension between them. who's going to be the first to notice?? keep them coming.

cheers

dreamy40

Date: 2008-06-29 07:51 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] annabirmingham.livejournal.com
Thanks very much - I'm happy you're enjoying it. More coming soon!
Anna x

Date: 2008-06-29 07:29 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jackien1968.livejournal.com
Uh oh.

Hey, Ennis, you're the one who started with the tickling, don't blame Jack!

Oh, dear, I hate bigots and prudes. Lady, your little kid can't tell whether or not two teenage boys wrestling and playfighting on the beach are attracted to each other or not. You have to be aware of sex to see sex everywhere you look -- plus you have to be nosy and have a steel rod up your rear.

Great chapter.

Jackie

Date: 2008-06-29 07:55 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] annabirmingham.livejournal.com
Jackie, your comment made me laugh! Yes, having a 'steel rod up your rear' is so not a good place to be!! I hate bigots too, that woman has some serious issues. You are so right about having to be aware of something in order to see it - that really annoys me about all the PC nonsense around today with regards to kids TV/books etc. If kids don't know then they don't care!!
Anna x

Date: 2008-06-29 08:01 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] poppyhoney-67.livejournal.com
oh no!!!! all that lovely time spent on the beach together and now its ruined...it all started before that stupid woman came and ruined things, talking of the prom didnt help matters either...god, I know how Jack feels, it would be hard for him to watch Ennis flirt with a girl after what they've had together...I hope it gets sorted out fast! But young love is always fraught with pain.

(oh and I'm really sorry but all the surfing just took me to thinking about Shelter, which is bad I guess when reading a BBM fic, hope you can forgive me?!!)

Date: 2008-06-30 06:01 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] annabirmingham.livejournal.com
Hi hon - like I said on EJ - I guess any surfing reference will make folks think of Shelter, so no worries!!

Hopefully all the good times will outweigh the bad for our boys :)
Anna x

Date: 2008-06-29 08:07 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] haljbg.livejournal.com
Like this story very much. Yesterday I read all thirteen chapters.
Poor Jack – hope Ennis will not break it off with him because of his fear.
Thanks, another great chapter
Emmy

Date: 2008-06-30 08:34 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] annabirmingham.livejournal.com
Hi Emmy - glad you caught up with the chapters. Thanks for reading!
Anna x

Date: 2008-06-29 08:30 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] buffymonmon.livejournal.com
ah...I really want to punch that woman now. Can I?

Very good chapter - and very hot! Looking forward to reading about the prom!

Date: 2008-06-30 08:34 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] annabirmingham.livejournal.com
LOL - sure, give her one from me too!!
Anna x

Date: 2008-06-29 08:50 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ramona4jake.livejournal.com
Like he is alone in this, or the only one hurt !.... He is selfish like that sometimes, and I hate him for that ! Hope he wont take it out on Jack !...
Thank you, Anna, hope you up-date soon !

Date: 2008-06-30 08:37 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] annabirmingham.livejournal.com
Yes, Ennis does have a habit of withdrawing into himself and not thinking about others feelings :( Either way, let's hope Jack can bring him round!
Anna x

Date: 2008-06-29 08:50 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] shieldmaid1.livejournal.com
Oh goodness. :( Ennis is so easily spooked. I would hate to see him start acting mean toward Jack after this. Hope they can find a way to make up. They unfortunately will have to deal with bigots--and this might be easier in a way than what happens when their friends find out. Argh. But thanks for a brilliant update! I can hardly believe how quickly you write--and it's such a treat for all of us.

Date: 2008-06-30 08:42 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] annabirmingham.livejournal.com
Thanks very much! I'm a couple of chapters ahead of what's on LJ as I want to try and post a chapter a week if I can!
Yes, Ennis is spooked easily - he's pretty concerned about what other people think (and what they will do), but perhaps it will be different if/when their friends find out
Anna x

Date: 2008-06-29 09:15 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] noreins.livejournal.com
Oh no - and things were going so well too :(

Loved their afternoon together - especially round about the point where Ennis told Jack to take his shorts off under water *drools* But who knows what's going to happen now...is Ennis about to retreat into his shell? God, I hope not...

Date: 2008-06-30 08:44 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] annabirmingham.livejournal.com
Mmm, the thought of J and E naked underwater kind of did things to me too!! ;)
Thanks for reading!
Anna x

Date: 2008-06-29 09:49 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sweetje.livejournal.com
Oh, things were going so well for them until the old biddy came alone and ruined their fun. I think a crab should crawl up her ass and pinch her. lol...
I hope Ennis hasn't been completely spooked by this unfortunate incident. Jack will have his work cut out for him now, to calm Ennis's fears.
Wonderful chapter. I can hardly wait for your next update.
I love this story! : )
Debra

Date: 2008-06-30 08:46 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] annabirmingham.livejournal.com
LOL - yes, i think a whole family of crabs should zone in on her ass!!
Ennis has a pretty weak spot when it comes to Jack, so hopefully Jack'll be able to bring him round!
Thanks so much for your comments!
Anna x

Date: 2008-06-29 09:51 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] acht-acht.livejournal.com
"Wow, thought Jack, pretty rude thing to say to people you don't know."
Yeah, well, that´s what I thought, too, bitch! We don´t want your sort here spooking our boys. And Ennis - oh my, it`s cute to see him all flustered, but he´s a big boy, right?
Well, the sex was hot enough to make me confident that Ennis will be back for more regardless ... and won´t have that much fun at the prom without Jack.
(Oh, and that was a detail I liked - impressive how deftly Jack secured his shorts while making out lol!)
Love this story - I hope for at leat 10 new chapters when I´m back from my holidays.
Clara

Date: 2008-06-30 08:47 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] annabirmingham.livejournal.com
Yeh too right - people like her shouldn't be allowed to talk to our boys - let alone look at them, doesn't she know who they are??!!
Yes, I have a feeling that Ennis will be back for more!
10 chapters?? will see what I can do! :)
Anna x

Four-Two Offense Chapter 14

Date: 2008-06-29 10:23 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bmshirts.livejournal.com
FUCK!!! If Ennis gets all paranoid, turtles up and pushes Jack away, I'm gonna have a cow! Just when I was getting to like this Ennis- his strong, 'I know what/who I want and I'm going to get it' attitude, now he just turns and walks away?! He started up with Jack in the first place, going after him until Jack became interested, pursued a relationship, now he walks away???
Shit! Carole

Re: Four-Two Offense Chapter 14

Date: 2008-06-30 08:52 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] annabirmingham.livejournal.com
Hi Carole - I love the expression 'turtles up'! hehe!
I think Ennis still knows what he wants, he's just been a little freaked out when he least expected it (and had let his guard down). Give him a bit of time and he should come around!
Anna x

Date: 2008-06-29 10:25 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] pjgale.livejournal.com
Uh-oh!

(: PJ

Date: 2008-06-30 08:52 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] annabirmingham.livejournal.com
Indeed!! Thanks for reading
Anna x

Date: 2008-06-29 10:27 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mira986.livejournal.com
~Just when everything was going well, that woman had to say something that harsh to the boys. They really weren't doing anything bad; nothing that I'd mind seeing. And Ennis... as always, withdraws.

I hope you'll update soon, they need to resolve this! Can't wait to see what you got stored for us in the next chapter!Thanks for this quick update!~

((HUGS))

Mira

Date: 2008-06-30 08:54 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] annabirmingham.livejournal.com
Thanks Mira - yes, I think there'd be a lot of us queuing up to see a bit of Jack and Ennis action given the chance!! :) She was a bit of a cow - probably just jealous!!
Anna x

Date: 2008-06-29 10:32 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tanzmaeusi.livejournal.com
They had such a nice afternoon and a really hot surfing lesson together and then this rude lady has to ruin it all, what a shame!! Hopefully Ennis won´t be spooked too much and they won´t have an awkward ride home or even a big fight on their way home, although I have to admit that a little angst makes the story even more interesting and exciting.
I´m very curious about the Prom night too, I don´t like the idea of Ennis "trying it on" with some girl any more than Jack does.
Thank you so much for the frequent updates of this wonderful story,
have a good night and a restful sleep
Claudia

Date: 2008-06-30 08:57 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] annabirmingham.livejournal.com
Thanks Claudia!
Sadly life isn't always a bed of roses for our boys and they have to overcome setbacks and angst every so often. I don't want Ennis to try it on with anyone else either, but he's still a bit worried about covering for him and Jack at the moment.
Thanks as always for your comments!
Anna x

Date: 2008-06-29 11:00 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mel0804.livejournal.com
Oh shit....!
Ennis is freaking out - that's not a good sign. And they still haven't talked to each other about their situation...

Date: 2008-07-01 06:34 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] annabirmingham.livejournal.com
Yes, Ennis does take things a little too personally at times. They do need to talk more too - all the smoochy stuff is nice but they need to share feelings too!
Anna x

Date: 2008-06-29 11:15 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tmn1966.livejournal.com
Uh oh. That would be a bit of a shock when you're not used to it, having someone come up to you and tell you you're disgusting. I thought Jack handled it nicely, but not Ennis. Which isn't a surprise, considering that he asked if anyone knew about them and that he should try to hook up with someone at prom.

Very nice update. Anxious to see what the next chapter will bring us.

Teri

Date: 2008-07-01 06:36 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] annabirmingham.livejournal.com
Hi Teri, thanks so much for commenting :)
Yes, I agree that calling anyone disgusting (especially someone you don't know) is pretty nasty. Jack is a little more upbeat about things than Ennis and can almost dismiss things, whereas Ennis does take stuff to heart more. I want to give him a big hug and tell him it'll all be ok!!
Anna x
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